As she paid for her shopping, she wondered why people felt weird spending a day alone in the mall. So far her day had been as close to perfect as possible. The barista at Starbucks made her drink just like she likes it, despite her complicated directions. She had found some steal deals at Zara and the perfect dress to wear to her best friend’s bachelorette party without even having to try. Her quiet alone day in the mall had gone as planned. As she took the elevator down to the basement where she had parked her car, she hummed a tune and mentally made plans of cozying up at home with a glass of wine. She stepped out of the elevator and confidently took a left and walked toward where she had parked her car. It took her a minute to realize that her car wasn’t there anymore. She looked around to make sure that she was at the correct spot and there was the poster she had made note of and that weird stain on the wall that she had noticed… but where was her car? She started walking around trying to find someone to help her but couldn’t find any parking assistant. As she looked around, she realized that she was alone in this gigantic car park and her panic began to rise. She started fishing around in her purse for something that she could use as a weapon. She settled on a nail file as she started walking around trying to find someone to help her. She couldn’t shake the feeling that someone was watching her and her heartbeat increased. Suddenly out of nowhere, a thin mist started filling the parking space making it difficult to see. She started panicking and rushed to the elevator to take her back to the mall.
She rushed out of the elevator, pushing people out of the way to reach the helpdesk. Once there, she narrated her ordeal to the personnel and asked to be accompanied to the parking to look for her car. The personnel asked her to calm down and offered her a chair and a glass of water. He then asked her to calmly repeat what had happened. As he heard her story, he looked at her in disbelief… Mist on this summer night? No parking assistants to help? He rang the line in the parking space and immediately got a response, the assistant assured him that there were over 10 of them in the space helping people. The assistant then confirmed that her car was parked in the spot where she had left it. She felt baffled. She couldn’t understand what was going on. It had all felt so real. Had she been dreaming? The personnel offered to walk her to her car in a few minutes and she agreed.
As the elevator door opened at the parking space level, she was shocked to find a totally different scenario. Multiple parking assistants were assisting multiple cars into and outside the space. They walked to the lot and there her car was. What had just happened? Had she dreamt it all? What was going on? The personnel helped her into the car and the assistants helped her out of the parking space. Yet, she couldn’t shake the feeling that she had been part of something sinister.
As soon as she left, the parking assistants ran around rearranging the area for their next victim. The mall helpdesk personnel had helped them identify their next target. Their goal? To scare the living lights out of a person for content for their YouTube channel. 😀
I tried to write a story that was spooky and funny for Halloween but I’m out of my writing element and it didn’t turn out as good as I had hoped. But I am also backkkkkk! I took a break of 2 weeks to just reset, deal with my emotions and just not pressurize myself to be active here. I hope November is a great month for all of us. 🙂
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An enjoyable read that made me smile at the end- excellent!
not on the shelf eh?
Great twist at the end!
Loved this & Happy Halloween! 🐈⬛🕸️🎃🍭👻
I don’t recall you writing fiction before, so I kept thinking this was just a weird story about you written in third person. I don’t know if you’re familiar with Twilight Zone (an old TV series in America), but your story had that kind of feeling to it.
How fun to write short stories! What a fun ending!
“…😱😨 Ok, what’s going to happen?Please, go on.”
I was enjoying the story too much, and the end messed up everything.
Good morning, friend!
Brilliant climax 👌🏽🙂
My god, that was a fun read ☺️
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This was super fun!! I hope you had an amazing Halloween. 🥰
loved your story Ru❣️
Great job on writing a Halloween-themed short story! It definitely had a spooky element to it with the mist and feeling of being watched, but the twist at the end with the parking assistants pulling a prank for their YouTube channel added a fun touch. It’s always important to take breaks and take care of ourselves, so it’s good to hear that you took some time for yourself. Happy Halloween to you too!
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omg. loved that plot twist
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